The Untold!
By Myself and Maddie Govier
Diary Entry : 02/04/2014
In my single cam drama, I am currently half way through in writing my story. The genre I have chose is a Thriller of two maybe three girls in a house by themselves. It starts by the girls coming in from a night out and the protagonist(Main Character) has red liquid on her hands. The audience will be unaware of the before event, I've done this so the audience can have their idea of what happened to her or what she did?
I have had positive feedback from class mates about my story. I already know what equipment, cast, crew and the diagetic and non-diagetic sounds that I will using.
The way I have broken up my piece is finding a title for each sequence for example:
1.Start - Mystery Entrance
2.First Appearance!
3.I Know what you did!
4.Lock down!
5.You missed a door!
I've done this to make it easier for myself when shooting my drama piece. As it stands my usual partner Maddie Govier is making this drama piece with me.
I haven't got as far as writing the script yet, but I have a good idea on the individual characters that will be the cast in this single camera drama. I feel that knowing your characters better will determine how far the script can go. Meaning if a character is not a professional actor and is quiet can't possibly have a loud voice, this will show discomfort on the screen. My idea was to use myself as the protagonist, because this drama will show the emotional enormity of this 'crisis'.
My attentions are to make the audience move to the edge of their seat. I saw this as an opportunity to use females other then males only because I know a male in trouble wont have the same reaction when a female is in trouble.
Diary Entry 2 : 30/04/2014
Myself and Maddie have made progress in making our single camera drama, by writing each minute of description of the ten minuets. We are now currently discussing the ending, but will eventually be making some minor changes. We have both written the proposal and have nearly finished it.
The Script is currently being written by myself and Maddie, long way to go but were definitely on the verge of smashing the preproduction work as a team and have no worries about the script so far.
Today we have been introduced to Aftereffects manipulating images, I found quiet interesting but found it hard grasp the hang of it. However in our production we are not likely to use after effect, but on the other hand could be useful for police lights, blood props, background bluer or transitions.
Today we also may be making a production schedule and shot list decisions of time of location etc.
Diary Entry 3 : 08/05/14
Today I and Maddie will be finishing of the treatment, which is almost done. We have also made a character profile of each of the characters.
Today with the script will by our main priority, as we are filming on Tuesday 13th, At the moment everything is going really well, the work is on schedual. I have no worries with this production, we have our cameras ready to take out on a Friday.
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CAST/CREW
Deanna Ricketts - Actress/Director
Maddie Govier - Actress/ Director
Jordan Halliwell - Stranger and Police Man
Brad Smith - Camera Man
Equipment - Book for : Friday 9th May
- Cannon D100
- Tri-pod
- Handy Cam
- Shot gun (Boom Mic)
- Boom Poll
Diagetic Sounds
- Police Sirens
- Scream
- Clock ticking
- Knock
Non- Diagetic Sounds
- Gradually build up of mystery music.
1. Start -- The Mystery Entrance EST: 1 min
Clock-- Door Handle(C/U), Bottom half of door(MS) Visual of legs, heels and Dress. Girls Enter, Protagonist falls on her knees with (blood) on her hands crawling to the drippy tap in the kitchen. Protagonist washes her hand (OHS) along side her, best friend is tearful and shocked. Best friend goes to lock the door but the protagonist is certain the door is already locked, so there is no need.
2.First Appearance EST: 1 minuet
Front door BANG, BANG(LS from the kitchen facing the door visual of the hall way). Girls do not wish to answer the door late at night so they walk to the living room window looking outside. Black figure acknowledges them but the girls pull the curtains across. They go up stairs closing the door behind them -- from door (20-30 seconds) Costume change in to pyjamas.
3. I KNOW WHAT YOU DID! EST:
A loud knock on the door begins shot to maddie looking worried then shot to dee feeling curious but not worried. (letter box Open and Closes)(CU) A note falls through the letter box but the Protagonist is upstairs unaware. She looks out of the window, the figure starts to walk of in the other directions but protagonist mistakes in seeing something else(CAM) then looses sight of him. Protagonist tries to relax as she's confused and generally a bit scared and cautious about the stranger.
4. Lock Down! EST: 1 min
Protagonist goes down stairs to have a look around for a peace of mind, then comes across a note and from that moment she realises she is completely worried. Protagonist rushes to all the windows and doors, full necessary lock down. Only the door she is most certain was locked, wasn't. As she goes to switch the back garden light of from the living room. What she doesn't know she had alarmed the stranger who went to behind the house, and reassured him it was definitely that house. Protagonist then slowly sits down on the sofa. --LS (Out back)-- Sofa of protagonist wrapped up lying down.
5. You Missed a Door! EST: 1 Min
-- Back garden (Diagetic wind and build up of non-Diagetic music) Camera tracking In front of the stranger following up the decking to the back door (which leads into the kitchen) -- handle from the inside gradually gets pushed down and as it opens cuts to -- Sofa, not long after she hears a noise which alarms her, she gets up and exits the living room double doors (darkish) as she turns left facing the kitchen door (lights are off) her intensions were to look upstairs. Protagonist slowly walks down the hall way but as she turned a face/eyes appear in the one of the square door glass of the kitchen door. With out notice she goes upstairs.
6. The tension! EST: 1 Min
As she goes upstairs checking all the rooms, she opens the door of where her best friend (Maddie) is on the bed with her head low and wrapped around her legs. (CU) -- face as she lifts her head, They talk about not being able to be honest.
7. The knowing Est: 1 min
They have a minor argument, Tori walks of down stairs with the hump. Her best friend gets up and walks up to the banisters looking down the banisters but when she sees the kitchen door open, she lowers her self. The stranger walks down the hall way but turns in (Maddies) direction, She ducks in complete silence. She realises a stranger is in the house.
8. Help? Est: 1 min
-- shot of sofa (tori) and in vision of the double doors, stranger walks past -- (C/U) phone (Maddies) ringing -- (M/S) -- (C/U) thumb rejecting the call and puts the phone out of sight-- Kiera with her back up against the wall by the banisters in tears she calls the police but is worried about the safety of her best friend.
9. Big finale Est: 1 Min
As she finishes the call looking away from the stair well (the back ground blurs out) the stranger stands there glaring at her. A second silence and Kiera whispers (asking for a pardon) Stranger steps closer and she screams.
Torie who is alarmed runs to the stair case, poking her head up at Kiera. (Dee) grabs a knife from the kitchen and switches the house lights of for a moment and shouts run(blacked out) Kiera barges the stranger and runs in one of the rooms, Tori at the bottom of the stairs trying to grab her phone*No Signal* Home phone no where to be found. Hoping for a sound or sign of her best friend or the where abouts of the stranger. (Dee) goes to turn the lights on at the other end of the hall and the stranger is stood there at the position she was in, with Kiera in front.
10. The end Est: 1 Min
Tori tries talking to him, asking him what he wants. Police sirens suddenly appear. Kiera says it's her fault in tears and wants tori to run. Tori Denys, this moment is very time consuming and rushing full of stress and decisions. --
(After effects)
-- out side down the street. police lights are at the end of the street. Get to the car park, one police man walk in Kiera lye's there with blood on her head and bruise on her eye in the living room unconscious. looks like it's been tipped up side down and had a struggle. The Camera Pans from Maddie to the side cabinet to a picture of tore.
(Policeman/Undercover - who knows the girls) **To be developed**
fade in, fade out-- music and credits.
The end.
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Rough script
Tori - Dark hair, Confident, drunk.
Kiera - Blonde hair, Scared, drunk.
Ext: In House, almost decorated, spacious, well kept.
Characters enter with tears and sound of emotion.
Maddie(KIERA)
So this is what happens on a night out.
Both look at (Dee's) hands.
Dee(TORI)(emotional yet confident)
I need to clean my hands.
SILENCE, Deep breathing and build up music.
Kiera(shocked and confused)-
Tori(eye contact)
course we are, you saw what was happening.
HUFF, Kiera walks over to the back door handle.
Pulls hand back and turns to look at dee to ask why.
Sorry, the door is always locked.
Tori heavily puts her hands down on the side in grief,
Knock, knock. Girls look at each other then the door.
Who knocks at 1o'clock in the morning?
Kiera
I don't know, but I don't think we should answer it?
Tori(agreeing)
No, neither do I.
Kiera slowly walks through the hall way followed by Tori into the living room. They look out the curtains.
Tori
Who is that? I've never seen him before in my life.
Kiera(curious)
What do you think he wants?
Tori
I don't know, but I'm sure he'll go away soon
Kiera (Quickly closing the curtains)
I think he just saw us.
Tori
Who cares, he'll soon be likely to leave
Kiera
Yeah, i don't know what I'm worrying about, I'm just tired.
Tori
Yeah, today has been stressful. think maybe we should get some shut eye.
Kiera smiles at tori, She knows Tori will always be there for her in her time of need. They walk up stairs and close the door behind them. Chance costume in to PJS.
Tori opens her eyes and looks out the window. Tori looks elsewhere then looses sight of him. Tori who's a little cautions about this stranger, she continuos down stairs to look around just for a peace of mind, she finds a note on the inside door step, changing her emotion, she is completely worried (heavy breathing) The lock down begins.
--shot of hands on all window handle, she realises the light in the back garden is on, she turns it lights of. She lyes on the sofa.
Few minuets as the stranger enters, Tori hears a noise, leaves the room and gradually walks towards the stairs up to maddie in her room.
Tori(tired voice)
Hey?
Kiera(mumbling)
Couldn't get too sleep.
Tori
Yeah same, I thought I heard something.
Kiera raises her head
but its nothing.
Kiera lowers her head back down to her knees.
Tori
Tell me what's wrong... Kiera?
Awkward silence
Kiera
Like you don't know?
Tori goes to walk out, a bit unsure what to say.
Kiera
You just going to walk out?
Tori(Softly)
I would love to help you kiera, you know I'm here. Don't you think I need break for tonight?
Full shot
Kiera
You do deserve it, but you're not effected by the fact we can't be honest with any one.
Tori
I'd rather lie to save my life, then be honest because no one will believe our story. It wasn't our fault! but it was the choice between US... or him.
--Silence--
Tori(softly)
I choose us.
Kiera
I choose us too... and I am sorry... but I can't just forget about it and act like nothing has happened. If there was another way maybe, we could --
Tori
Well then you know what to do then don't you, phone the police, get a clear conscious and be thrown in the cells for life, just Leave me out of it.
Tori walks away down stairs with the slight hump, Kiera speaks but doesn't finish her sentence in time.
Kiera
Tori I'm --
Kiera gets up and walks to the banisters, looking down she see's Tori walk towards the living room, however the kitchen door opens, Kiera lowers herself, stranger walks down the hall way, stops and looks at Kiera, she ducks in silence.
**shot of sofa with of Tori on sofa with stranger walking past**
Kiera gets her phone and rings Tori (Heavy breathing and silent panicking) -- cut to Tori (disconnecting call) -- To Kiera, who then calls 999.
Hello, Hello, I need help? somebody is in the house. I don't know who he is, he's wearing all black, I can't see his face. Can you track my location. Please please hurry, My friend is downstairs on her own, I don't know what to do!!
Silence
Please, Please hurry!
*Back ground unblurs* Kiera looks at the stairs and the stranger just stands there.
Kiera(In distress)
Silence
I don't know why your here, but please don't hurt us.
I beg you.
(stuttering with shock)
Please, I've phoned the police they'll be here any minuet now.
(Silence)
Stranger walks forward a little bit, while Kiera walks back.
Any closer, I'll scream.
Stranger takes one step closer and Kiera SCREAMS.
alarming Torie who looks up the stairs, grabs knife and turns lights of upstairs.
Tori(In Distress)
Run, Kiera. RUN
Kiera barges the stranger and manages to go some where else up stairs. Lights are off and Kiera is waiting by the little cabinet in her room.
Stranger walks around mysteriously, Squeaky floor. Visual of Feet. Lights are of. Kiera stands up thinking he'd gone else where, but she was wrong. Stranger put Kiera at gun point.
Stranger
Move, speak and ill kill you.
Tori who is at the end of the corridor who looks upon the stranger and Kiera who were standing there at the bottom of the stairs, Strangers arm wrapped round Kiera's throat. Kiera in tears.
*Music change non-diagetic*
Tori
What do you want?
We don't deserve this?
Leave us a lone!!
Kiera
Its my fault I should of screamed sooner Tori.
Tori
No its not, you didn't invite him in.
Kiera
Tori, Run
Tori
I am not leaving! were in this together.
Kiera
I've called the police.
Stranger
Go in there.
Tori
Oh you have voice.
Stepping back together in the living room, Tori standing infront of the windows and Stranger with Kiera by the TV.
Tori
Take everything, why are you just standing there?
**Sound of police Siren**
Kiera
POLICE!!
Tori looks away at the curtains (Lights flashing) and turns her head round to the stranger sharply.
**After effects etc..**
Police at the door wide open, a man normal cloths/suite.
Agent Danny Dan
Undercover Cop from post B in London, suspected homicide. May have been believed there was another girl at the scene.
(after a shake of hands by other police man, pans up to his face, smiling -- cut to the start shot of his waist down walks in, Looks at Kiera then turns his attention to a picture of the best friends.
Zoom on Picture with hand holding it.
The End
Credits & Music
